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HollowRabbits
Amateur artist, likes horror themed stuff (mainly creepypastas), espaƱol.
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First creepypasta.

Posted by HollowRabbits - November 13th, 2023


This is the first creepypasta i've ever written in my life, it took me a long time to write it out since i did it in a second language and because of real life responsabilities such as college.


I did the best i could but i'm more than likely gonna remake this further down the line once i've improved.


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https://rentry.co/VoidCD


Please give me honest feedback if you have any since i genuinely want to get better at this.


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For your first creepypasta, it's pretty neat despite some oddities within the story. If you took the time with Lady Void's motivations and the story on it's setting, I think it would had been better to help with the narrative with the main character and his reason of owning the disk and wanting to destroy it after all she did was cause him nose bleeds and headaches at best. There's something to be desired but maybe having it leaned to a more sad approach like before, would've helped as well. Nice one either way.

Thought this was pretty decent, stumbled on this. I thought the game's events were interesting but a bit of the writer's dialogue felt a bit wooden. However, I found the time counting down across levels as a good tension builder, cool idea.